PLEASE READ!! Tell me what you think of the first page of my book?

There are some things I like and some things that I don't like. I like how you didn't just completely give up the setting in the beggining and that you gave details of the surroundings over time. But you still have to work on your grammar and spelling (muscles not mussels). I did like the emotion that you were able to make me visualize. I could tell that it was a very tense moment that these men were in. I did think however that your descriptions were to blunt. Instead of saying things like " frozen air coming from their mouths." try saying something more engulfing like " pathetic puffs of exhaustion came from there dry fringed mouths into the cold void. Stretch your vocabulary when giving the descriptions.